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OK, being picky but the first thing I noticed is that you say "i" all through the wording, instead of "I". Grammatical errors make it look a bit amateurish. Also, it suggests you are a "one man band". That can put off professional customers who are looking for a supplier that can meet their needs whatever, and sometimes they will discard anyone that gives that impression.
If it was me (and I did commission some advertising when I was self employed) I'd make use of the royal "we" whenever possible. It makes you look a bigger company, more professional and offers the customer a bit of comfort that you aren't going to fail to turn up because of the odd cold or domestic emergency. Other than that, looks good. Best of luck with it.
Just for you i've, sorry we've expanded the company.
and added a few bits..
Just had a quick scan, looks good and is easy to navigate.
The only thing is the home page under Carpentry you go "We" this "We" that...... then on the Property maintenance side you go back to "I" this "I" that.......for continuity you need either to be "we" or "I" not both as it contradicts it self...!! As pointed out before "we" sounds better.
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